Thursday, 18 October 2012

The eye

The eye
It took a couple of months before we could identify the creature from the eye, its now the year 2013.
How lonely I feel in my laboratory, but thats another story, and this story is about the creature.

Day 1: as we finally identify the creature’s eye, a creature pops up, but it is too big to fit on the screen, so we set off to NASA for their big computer. Once we plug the data file in we see the creature has a huge stone colored body with two big eyes, we zoom in to the body, identifying the inside of it. We see it has a number of five hearts colored deep green. While all the other NASA and my scientists are looking at the hearts, I push the “play” button and it shows that when the heart beats it changes color, so does its eyes and body, now it has a blue heart, red skin, and rainbow eyes. I marvel in this discovery, but things took a turn for the worst, everyone started to hunt these endangered creatures with electro hook, the best thing to kill a fish with a shock!

Day 2: Everyone was asking where to find these creatures, so I had to change my email address, phone, facebook, and twitter! I was stressed even after no more calls. I was literally tearing my hair out because of where to find them and put them in their own safe habitat.
Then someone knocked on the door.
I stepped up opened the door, and it was one of my fellow scientists.
He started saying “Boss Boss!” holding a piece of paper.
I yawned and said “what?”
He said “We found where to find the creature!”
“WHERE?” I shouted. My eyes open wide even with sleep in them.
“In” he said then whispered “Underground in caves using their tails to dig dirt.”
“Well we are going to set off!” I said.

Day 3: we were in my secret sub-plane invention, and we had found a burrow at last, we were inside it. it was a little dusty and dark in the entrance but in the deepest part of the cave it was not dark at all, there was an island with a giant tree on top of it, and it had glowing roots! We were shocked that so much minerals, even jewels were inside this cave.

Day 4. now things were just fine, we realised we don't need to get the creatures a habitat, because they already have there own place of choice.

The ocean.
A note from the scientist: No one but us found the creatures in the end, and I got to name it. I called it the colourful genius.
And no colourful geniuses were harmed in the end, but we got an example of the root, we made it into a lamp.

The End.


  1. Awesome amazing job
    as I was reading I felt special being able to read something so well written. Well Done Teva be proud :) great job

  2. I love this story, Teva. Eden made a great comment and I felt the same way when first reading it on Google docs. You should be so proud of yourself!

  3. Wow Teva. You are an author. I love your vocabulary choices very scientific! I also enjoyed the ending where no geniuses were harmed. interesting that you made it into a lamp. Could save the world some energy. Well done Teva.
    Hope you get some more readers and comments. Keep up the good work.
    Mrs. Emma Martin (eMartian) Teacher at Weymouth Primary Auckland

  4. Amazing Teva:)
    I really enjoyed reading your eye writing:)
    Great idea to put it in like a diary:)

  5. Wow Teva. That is an amazing story. You are such an amazing writer. Well done. I love your story because you made it interesting. What do you enjoy about writing and why?

  6. Wow Teva. This is such a great story. I great more understanding each time I read the story. You have set it out very good. Great idea doing a diary>
    Well done Teva:) Katrina

  7. Cool Teva! I like your eye story. It is really descriptive and full of great ideas. Your writing has taken off heaps sincde the start of the year. WELL DONE AND KEEP UP THE GREAT WRITING! :c)

  8. Awesome Teva!
    I really like your writing and I like how you did it in days like day 1,2,3 and so on. Well done!

  9. Awesome Teva!
    I really enjoyed reading your story it is great.
    I really like the end.

  10. What a great story teva, have you made a drawing of it?

  11. Cool Teva! Your eye story is really entertaining, very descriptive and full of wonderful ideas. Your writing has taken off heaps since the start of the year. I agree with Amy. You're such an amazing writer. WELL DONE AND KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK! :c)

    From Kazzie!

  12. Cool Teva!
    I like your writing, it is very technical and creative!
    I like how colored genuis could change the colours of It's body!
    What would you do if you had discovered a new creature?



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