Friday, 14 June 2013

Camp Day 1: Kiwi encounter

 I brush the gentle but tough kiwi’s feathers. I thought it would be softer, Though. 
By listening to the kiwi creche staff, I learnt some cool things!
Did you know that kiwis lay eggs the 3rd of the size of its body?

I really like all the facts I just learned.

We jump into our vehicle, now we are going  to camp!
The Truck rattled and tattled as we drove away.

The kiwi was quite cute, but it was a little angry, it was like waking him up in the middle of the night (for him)

WALT choose words that describe a moment (in an exciting way) for the reader
  • begins in the action
  • present tense (I am, not I was)
  • short, sharp sentences
  • strong verbs
  • uses the senses (look, feel, hear, taste, smell)
  • language features (simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia, metaphor)
  • show personality (sounds like you, humour, feelings, exaggeration)


  1. Teva were you Frightened or scared when you were gonna hold the kiwi
    and how does he feel like when you touch the kiwi

  2. Teva that's an Amazing story. You look so TALL in that picture. great work Teva, an awesome effert



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