Sunday, 7 July 2013

The Lightning Trick (Part 1)

As the lightning struck I hid under my pillow.
What was happening?
I heard another boom of thunder.
I put my pillow over my ears and slowly went to sleep...

As I slowly opened my eyes I saw that I was still in my tent...
I unzipped my tent then saw the flashes of blue and red lightning zap down the huge mountain...
I quickly comando rolled back into my tent and zipped it up tight.
I looked out the window and saw this huge rainbow beam come out of the mountain.
Everything went black.

I woke up slowly, I saw that my tent was still intact, and I was still alive.
What had happened?
I unzipped my tent.
Of course.
NOTHING had happened.

Nope, I was wrong.
A stick was stuck in the ground right next to my tent, a stick.
What the heck happened?
Well I do like sticks, so I’ll keep this.
2 hours later (That's what it felt like) we were walking towards this old shack.
I decided to go into the forest and play
I decided to use the stick like a gun.
“PEW PEW PEW! take that trees!”
At that very instant I saw one of the tree's branches turn into a gun.

My heart almost skipped a beat.
“Uuuuuuh” I said, trembling with fear.
“Levitate?” I said as I lifted my stick up, and the gun lifted up too!
“I am loving this already.” I said.
“CHOCOLATE TREE!” I said as I turned stuff into chocolate

5 minutes later.
“Teva time to go!” I heard my mum shout
“JUST A MINUTE!” I shouted, then thought quick.
“Uhhh Undo?” I said as everything went back to normal.
“YEAH!” I said as I commando rolled away with the stick in my backpack.

We Stopped for a lunch break, I sneaked off into the forest with my lunch box and turned my food into chocolate.
“Good boy for eating that lettuce and tomato mayonnaise sandwich, Teva!” My mum said
“I was hungry?” I said

I walked along kicking some regular sticks around.
We were almost home, and something told me using that stick at home would be a bit more fun.


  1. Fantastic storywriting, Teva!

    I like how the events in the story grow gradually - it keeps the reader guessing. It reminds me of a short Roald Dahl story, "The Magic Finger". I wonder what your character (is it you?) will use the stick for at home in part two...

  2. Wow Teva!
    I would love to have that happen to me!
    Wouldn't you?
    I love your imaginative writing!
    Well done:-)

  3. Cool Teva!!
    I like your imagine story Teva,
    it really got me into thinking what was really happening.
    Keep up the great work Teva!!!!

  4. Awesome Teva.
    You have a great imagination.
    I can't wait to read part two.

  5. Great story Teva.
    I love all the chocolate parts.
    And great start on the first paragraph.
    Well done.



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